tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post8767144465037823998..comments2023-07-30T07:30:50.256-07:00Comments on Tumblewords: Love 'kuTumblewords:http://www.blogger.com/profile/04279038951489894119noreply@blogger.comBlogger17125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-33528975168797885772008-02-16T06:08:00.000-08:002008-02-16T06:08:00.000-08:00I really really enjoyed this! I gather you have sp...I really really enjoyed this! I gather you have spring starting (we don't. sigh). The brown bat and long johns made me chuckle! I'm looking forward to one coming and one going! The lambs were a great vision for me. <A HREF="http://meeyauw-pad.blogspot.com/2008/02/one-deep-breath-found-in-wandering.html" REL="nofollow">My One Deep Breath is here.</A>Andreehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08159511912645034019noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-35704107415717840092008-02-14T16:20:00.000-08:002008-02-14T16:20:00.000-08:00Mmm. Steaks on the barbie. Mmm, steak. I, too, lov...Mmm. Steaks on the barbie. Mmm, steak. I, too, love the thought here:<BR/><BR/>bare feet<BR/>long johns ditched<BR/>open doors<BR/><BR/>I hope you won't mind if I suggest a little bit of transitioning for smoothness of cadence and to make it two parts as haiku, instead of three, which can sound telegraphic. Something to make the love or sharing apparent? Something to the effect of:<BR/><BR/>four bare feet...<BR/>our long johns ditched<BR/>at the open door<BR/><BR/>Well, maybe that's not EXACTLY how you saw and mean it...I can just see two streakers in love heading barefoot out into the (Idaho) neighborhood.<BR/><BR/>I love your spontaneous feelings of enjoyment of life, family, nature, food and freedom in these poems.<BR/><BR/>A good exercise when beginning to learn haiku is to work around just one kigo...for instance, "crocus," "lamb" and "springtime" are all spring kigo. Example:<BR/><BR/>first crocus<BR/>spreading out widely...<BR/>the farmer's smile<BR/><BR/>one bouncy lamb—<BR/>a smile flickers across<BR/>the farmer's face<BR/><BR/>There have been haiku, even by Japanese master haijin, written with more than one, although they are more rare and can be considered "radical" :^D<BR/><BR/>I hope it's ok for an old haiku poet to offer a little guidance. I'm not sure if the Haiku: One Deep Breath encourages or allows it, or what? I just know that there are some wonderful, stirring thoughts in each contributing blogger's poems which want to take form as haiku. If its not ok, I'll ditch my long johns for a jaunt outside in Florida's current winter chill.Debihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01888000923314624612noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-53810455374810068862008-02-13T07:39:00.000-08:002008-02-13T07:39:00.000-08:00Wow... thanks for the glimpse of Spring... it's st...Wow... thanks for the glimpse of Spring... it's still a long, long winter.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-48866215261903864952008-02-13T00:31:00.000-08:002008-02-13T00:31:00.000-08:00What a refreshing beautiful poem. We already had h...What a refreshing beautiful poem. We already had heaps of steaks on the BBQ. We have had the warmest summer ever.Marjahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17458942200244031009noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-1121423037632843032008-02-12T16:19:00.000-08:002008-02-12T16:19:00.000-08:00Lovely! Glad to see spring is springing here!Lovely! Glad to see spring is springing here!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-88448851643132249552008-02-12T13:28:00.000-08:002008-02-12T13:28:00.000-08:00Love your 'ku. It will be nice when Spring arrive...Love your 'ku. It will be nice when Spring arrives, even tho it isn't cold here...well, not really. Not like Chicago, etc. But Spring always seems like things are being born again.J Chttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16418645028718782130noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-8944788317372504982008-02-12T13:26:00.000-08:002008-02-12T13:26:00.000-08:00A celebration of life (and therefore love) with is...A celebration of life (and therefore love) with is well balanced.<BR/>Nicely done.spacedlawhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12462723005560128474noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-24898971553621098492008-02-12T13:22:00.000-08:002008-02-12T13:22:00.000-08:00beautiful as always... can't wait to see the crocu...beautiful as always... can't wait to see the crocus...and yes, the bats are crazy here... bare feet..yr brave!!!little wing writerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16010376737431344381noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-62883814520814066622008-02-12T09:00:00.000-08:002008-02-12T09:00:00.000-08:00your love for the season really shines in this ser...your love for the season really shines in this seriesqualcosa di bellohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15107076097533430296noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-28082782373357732612008-02-12T00:53:00.000-08:002008-02-12T00:53:00.000-08:00Excellent seasonal ku. I most like the bouncing la...Excellent seasonal ku. I most like the bouncing lambsCrafty Green Poethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02486633917197181851noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-7675567913937959702008-02-11T23:06:00.000-08:002008-02-11T23:06:00.000-08:00lol re the longjohns!! but truly wonderful images ...lol re the longjohns!! but truly wonderful images evoked of spring and new life coming to the surface again!Everydaythingshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02562558164959015562noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-13936697855132354432008-02-11T17:43:00.000-08:002008-02-11T17:43:00.000-08:00The last one in particular brought a smile to my f...The last one in particular brought a smile to my face.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-40203233105047364642008-02-11T16:46:00.000-08:002008-02-11T16:46:00.000-08:00Truly each is a breath of fresh air! Thank you, fr...Truly each is a breath of fresh air! Thank you, from your snowy neighbor to the east.Quiet Pathshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00758542150832581706noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-28389061819443546412008-02-11T14:43:00.000-08:002008-02-11T14:43:00.000-08:00happened upon your blogjust want to sayi love Quee...happened upon your blog<BR/>just want to say<BR/>i love Queen Anne's Lace<BR/>and the genuine<BR/>i found here<BR/><BR/>billyBilly Joehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13418687613478926097noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-36108792050184604882008-02-11T13:53:00.000-08:002008-02-11T13:53:00.000-08:00You seem to have emerged from all that snow! There...You seem to have emerged from all that snow! There is a playful humour at work.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-27842269214675760802008-02-11T12:52:00.000-08:002008-02-11T12:52:00.000-08:00The relationships between the lines and between th...The relationships between the lines and between the verses suggest a happy life at peace with nature. I like this very much.<BR/><A HREF="http://slcpoems.blogspot.com/2008/02/one-deep-breath-love.html" REL="nofollow">Writing in Faith: Poems</A>SandyCarlsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10752798823532580733noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-56911848545057269432008-02-11T12:18:00.000-08:002008-02-11T12:18:00.000-08:00I will admit that seasonal 'ku are very difficult ...I will admit that seasonal 'ku are very difficult down here. <BR/><BR/>I love how transition from serious to funny. :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com